You’ve provided some good starting points, but more background is needed into the importance and scope of this issue in Canada. How many parents need childcare in Canada? How much do parents typically spend on childcare per year? Be specific. This can also help to highlight the importance of this topic. You’ll want to spend most of your final letter describing the evidence showing that implementing a national childcare program would address a social determinant of health and improve people’s health and wellbeing. Your letter should also provide some description of what social determinants are, why they are important, and what social determinant of health this policy option would address. You might look for research studies that evaluate the model in Quebec, which has been in place for many years.
You do no provide clear referenced in APA (a hyperlink is not adequate).

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