I want the essay to be re written with the same Ideas. It is about single story and about how Nepali people living in developed country as US are much more narrow minded than Nepali People Living in Nepal with is a developing country. The professor is very strict about the language and organization.  Below attached is the comments that she gave me in the essay that I submitted. I want you to rewrite this essay with much more better organization and english, Below is the professor’s comment  I do not want to change my topic but just the orentation. If you could also see this video 

Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie’s “The Danger of a Single Story”

then you would have a better idea of what kind of essay she is expecting
“This essay started off with a great deal of relevance on a social issue of gender expectations in immigrant communities. But your focus was not clear. Which single story are you seeking to unpack and correct? What misconceptions on a shared, social single story are you examining? You referred to several different ones, and you need to narrow your focus, unify it into a thesis, and maintain that purpose throughout. This also needs to go beyond personal narrative and branch out to a shared social problem; otherwise,you lose your audience. Finally, there is no research, as required. You might revise this.”