this is an essay on my annotated bibliography. I recived an 80 on it with thease comments:
“Olivia,
I think this is a solid research statement and source selection. You need to refine the thesis direction a little to reach your full potential. For example, don’t introduce the BIC and leave it hanging, introduce it early in the intro for the final and clearly explain significance. Who are the major players? This information also needs to be included, don’t always refer to it as ethnic based violence – who actually is involved? It seems that there are two parts 1) background on context/causes of ethnic violence, and 2) community-level conflict mediation institutions. I wouldn’t stray from this, structure your paper accordingly and make it clear.
I think the annotations are well done. You might want to check google scholar and do a keyword search to include any recent or well-cited sources that you might have missed.
Great work,
Paul”
please make the chnages that he explained. The essay is on Ethnic Violence in the Democratic Republic of Congo just like my bibliography you will be going off that. I know this is short notice but it is worth a lot so take your time when writeing as much as you can and use real life examples.